Monday, March 15, 2010

Simon's Love Scene/Blogfest

Today's regularly scheduled post is being pre-empted for something unusual. I am participating in Simon Larter's Love Scene/Blogfest. I believe there was a throw down of sorts on a Tweet one night and Simon came up short. Now, the rules are simple, a love scene that's PG but also MG. Which I'm going to pretend I'm stupid and don't know what MG means. After reading a few blogs this morning I'm also stupid and don't know what a love scene is either. Do kids in Middle Grade really have sex, or think about sex, or want sex? I must be REALLY old now. Okay here goes...

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Due to the paranoia of the author, this excerpt has been removed. Sorry.

27 comments:

sarahjayne smythe said...

Suh-weet. You gave us more Genna and Tony and their first kiss. Didn't go too well, did it? :) But I love that last line.

Piedmont Writer said...

Sarah Jayne -- Thanks, I liked that line too. Yeah, I'm totally into G & T these days, I'm gonna sneak them in whenver I can.

Summer said...

Ooh, sassy! I love it!

laurel said...

"I knew I was playing with fire"! Great line!

You intro nailed why I didn't participate. Middle school kids being intimate is something I can only picture in an abusive situation or in cases where kids have been "switched on" sexually far too young due to an unhealthy home environment. I had an idea for the fest along those lines, then realized it really doesn't fit my blog platform.

Some good ol' romance seemed a perfectly fine way to go.

Carolina Valdez Miller said...

Oh, love that last line! Ha!! What a bad boy. VERRRRY nice ;) Very realistic characters. And yes, it's pretty much impossible to write an MG sex scene. I think the only way you could really do it is if the tween characters are not participating in the act, but perhaps listening in or something like that, but really, I don't think MG goes far beyond snogging. But MG madness aside, lovely scene! You developed it beautifully. "...Genna in public, and Rosa after you kiss me." ha!! Well done.

Piedmont Writer said...

Summer -- Thanks. It is a little bit isn't it?

Laurel -- Yeah, I had trouble with the whole MG concept too, which is why I just threw this out there. I didn't have my first kiss until I was 15, so there was no way I could even do anything with 8-12 yr.olds.

Carolina -- Yes, Tony is a bad boy, but back in 1976 they were all bad. Thanks, "Genna in public, Rosa after you kiss me" I liked that a lot too.

Simon C. Larter said...

Do kids in MG really think about sex, or want sex? Yes. Some kids, anyway. That girl in 8th grade that had a "reputation" did, I'm pretty sure.

No worries on the no booty thing, good lady. I think it's a perfectly fine scene, even if they didn't go farther than smooching. Love the last line. :)

Shelley Sly said...

I'm with the others -- I love that last line. But I also love how I'm getting to know Genna more. This scene was so cute!

Livia said...

haha, playing with fire...

Talli Roland said...

Love the last line, but I also like 'craned her neck like a contortionist'.

Great scene!

Piedmont Writer said...

Thanks you guys, I guess it's unanimous then, playing with fire is a hit.

Simon -- I wouldn't know how to write sex anyway, it's been so long I barely remember how to do it myself.

Shelley -- Yeah, Genna's been on my shoulder for a few weeks now, she's got this thing about being all over the blog. Some day maybe I'll get my own life back.

Livia -- Hey thanks for joining the club!

Talli -- Believe it or not that was a last minute add-on this morning. That's what happens when the clocks change. I was up at 4:30. I don't know why.

Elaine 'still writing' Smith said...

"It took almost forty-five minutes of slow maneuvering but Genna finally managed to stand by herself along the same wall as Tony."
OMG I have so done that!

Piedmont Writer said...

Elaine -- Thanks for noticing. Yeah, I've done it too, although with not the same results.

Lola Sharp said...

LOVE that last line!

Tiffany Neal said...

This is great! I am glad that you played the rebel cause and kept it for real PG just like me! I know that MG kids might think about it and actually do it, but it's a bit ooogie to me.

I loved your writing and the last line was priceless. :)

Portia said...

Very fun, and I loved the spice! You have some great dialogue. For example, “You can call me Genna in public, and Rosa after you kiss me.”

and

“Hey, it’s no big deal Rosa. I knew I was playing with fire when I brought you out here.”

Way to go!

Piedmont Writer said...

Lola -- Thanks!

Tiffany -- I don't know if I played the rebel or just didn't follow the directions, but I am repulsed that MG kids are thinking about sex. I know I wouldn't write it.

Portia -- Thanks, I love my dialogue, someone said it was snarky. I write the way I talk I guess.

LK Gardner-Griffie said...

Very enjoyable scene. I really like the recognition that Tony is a bad boy and that's why Genna wants to get to know him.

And snarky it is. Well done.

Piedmont Writer said...

Thank you very much LK Gardner-Griffie. I appreciate a good bit of snark.

DL Hammons said...

Morale of the story...kiss the girl who asks for it and get burned!! :)

It was great!

VR Barkowski said...

Playing with fire is most definitely a hit. Great dialogue throughout. Very real. What is the appeal of bad boys, anyway?

Very well done!

Lady Glamis said...

Awww, that's actually really cute! In a bad-boy kind of way. :)

Piedmont Writer said...

DL -- Fun-nee, very Fun-nee. I'm glad you liked it.

VR -- Thank you. I guess I better come up with some other great lines for the rest of this then.

Glam -- Thanks. I don't think Tony's all that, but we'll see.

Sara McClung ♥ said...

"I’d stay away from Tony if I were you Genna, he’s got a reputation.”

Which only made Genna want to meet him more.

Brilliant!! That is so spot on. It reminds me of the boy I dated my freshman year of high school. Someone warned me to stay away from him and it made him all that more tempting =) (We dated on and off for four years, so I guess it was an ok move on my part.)

Piedmont Writer said...

Sara -- Who doesn't love a bad boy??? God knows I've had my share.

Hayley said...

The playing with fire bit was cute, I adored it! Very spunky, sassy, just overall good. I'm gald I got to it, I only just posted late last night and didn't have any time to look through everyone elses stuff but I'm so glad I got here, this was great!

Piedmont Writer said...

Thanks Hayley, That's a nice compliment.