tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post6458369110927253657..comments2023-10-05T05:20:59.743-04:00Comments on Piedmont Writer: Something - SomethingAnne Gallagherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-37589527872587821352010-05-15T20:30:42.200-04:002010-05-15T20:30:42.200-04:00Ok, so I know that you already took this down, but...Ok, so I know that you already took this down, but I read it and then forgot to leave a comment! DUH!!! total blonde moment. <br /><br />I absolutely loved this, I literally had tears in my eyes when Sal took Fortuna in his arms. It was so beautiful and moving, I just loved it. You are so talented :)Crystal Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06665844725894074136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-28864909258898109942010-05-14T06:19:27.187-04:002010-05-14T06:19:27.187-04:00Elliot -- Thank you kind sir. I love writing dial...Elliot -- Thank you kind sir. I love writing dialogue. IT's the rest of the book I have trouble with.<br /><br />Amy -- I thought you were taking a blog break. Thanks for stopping by. I mean it's still a first draft and all, so who really knows where it will end.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-44654805777923943902010-05-14T01:42:31.054-04:002010-05-14T01:42:31.054-04:00I like how you ended this. Nice.I like how you ended this. Nice.Unspokenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16065870952905767595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-63974401821911561832010-05-14T00:33:38.151-04:002010-05-14T00:33:38.151-04:00Anne, your dialogue has wonderful flow. I've ...Anne, your dialogue has wonderful flow. I've read many published works with conversations that come off the page as "stiff." Dialogue should feel natural to the reader, allowing them no choice but to believe every word. You pulled it off.Elliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-62904566027585872342010-05-13T21:15:28.073-04:002010-05-13T21:15:28.073-04:00Tara -- I used to work with Alzheimer's patien...Tara -- I used to work with Alzheimer's patients and it's so sad. And scary. And we'll see what happens with Pete. I'm still not sure yet. Genna hasn't really told me what she wants to do.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-41541886624883457512010-05-13T20:29:38.745-04:002010-05-13T20:29:38.745-04:00Poor Sally :( My grandfather was in denial even af...Poor Sally :( My grandfather was in denial even after my grandmother almost burned the house down - for the 3rd time. It's very sad stuff. <br /><br />Pete isn't sounding like a bad back-up plan. A girl's gotta keep her options open.Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09008153523366719973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-86003855168826677652010-05-13T19:55:16.072-04:002010-05-13T19:55:16.072-04:00Michelle -- Garnering years of experience with my ...Michelle -- Garnering years of experience with my own family, I thought they were 'real'.<br /><br />Shelley -- Thanks. Hopefully we get to the 'love triangle' at Billy's Beach Bar soon. We'll see what happens.<br /><br />Don -- Thanks. It's nice to know I didn't mess up with the 'new guy'. I wasn't sure how I should play Pete, totally in her face or shy. I think I caught a nice balance.<br /><br />Sarah Jayne -- I think Pete wants the spark but Genna might still be on the fence. I have to write another between her and Tony to find out what happens.<br /><br />Susan -- I love Sal and Fortuna myself, and I think being married for almost 40 years it has to come across on the page. There's so much more behind the scenes that you guys haven't read. I'm glad you can see it in what little I do post.<br /><br />Lola -- My love, thank you so much. And I don't know about Tony yet. Genna's got a lot on her plate right now.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-77002086250644994882010-05-13T19:23:10.303-04:002010-05-13T19:23:10.303-04:00Loved it. As always.
Easy flow. You are excellent ...Loved it. As always.<br />Easy flow. You are excellent at dialogue and relationships.<br /><br /> I'm Team Tony!Lola Sharphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14394765053485642935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-44449844940143663822010-05-13T18:34:44.254-04:002010-05-13T18:34:44.254-04:00You've done a wonderful job with the relations...You've done a wonderful job with the relationship between Sal and Fortuna. You can really tell how much they love each other. Well done!Susan Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02433408456603462774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-68678564805402949932010-05-13T18:25:31.153-04:002010-05-13T18:25:31.153-04:00I love Sal here. I feel the weight on his shoulder...I love Sal here. I feel the weight on his shoulders. And I'll have to go with Nicole and Shelley on this. I like the idea of Peta and Genna together. That little spark could be fanned very nicely. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-83457984912793451132010-05-13T18:23:20.720-04:002010-05-13T18:23:20.720-04:00Very nice! Fluid, easy to read, I didn't stum...Very nice! Fluid, easy to read, I didn't stumble over a single sentence. Your dialogue is very real and characters engaging. Kudos!! :)DL Hammonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02007260062331783715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-66050102088535178332010-05-13T18:15:11.794-04:002010-05-13T18:15:11.794-04:00I love it! First of all, your dialogue is incredi...I love it! First of all, your dialogue is incredible, as always. I always feel like I'm eavesdropping on them when I read your writing. And second, I have to admit that I really liked the exchange between Genna and Pete. I still like Tony, but Pete doesn't seem so bad either. I like the unfolding drama with Fortuna's memory too. This is fantastic! :)Shelley Slyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07981620646634240160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-66113052120856122972010-05-13T16:15:56.445-04:002010-05-13T16:15:56.445-04:00I like the Italian words you put in there. They wo...I like the Italian words you put in there. They work nicely!Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-21424203872593584212010-05-13T15:55:21.758-04:002010-05-13T15:55:21.758-04:00Matthew -- Thanks, that's the nicest thing any...Matthew -- Thanks, that's the nicest thing anyone's said about my characters!<br /><br />Terry -- Thanks, very very much!<br /><br />Sarah -- The bane of my existance -- -ly words!<br /><br />Nicole -- Give me a few more chapters and you might change your mind about Tony but I hear what you're saying. I'm not too thrilled with Tony at this point either.<br /><br />Talli -- Thanks so much. I'm glad they're not just plastic.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-44520182151688318922010-05-13T14:06:30.118-04:002010-05-13T14:06:30.118-04:00Anne, your characters always seem to spring right ...Anne, your characters always seem to spring right off the page! I love the dialogue, too. Great stuff!Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-59448985802563405172010-05-13T11:32:19.676-04:002010-05-13T11:32:19.676-04:00Every excerpt brings me closer to these wonderful ...Every excerpt brings me closer to these wonderful characters. Uncle Sally is awesome. Oh, and I'm hoping those were little sparks flying around Genna and Pete. I'm immediately rooting for them instead of Tony -- can't explain why. I guess in my own life, baggage in a relationship is always more of a pain than it's worth.<br /><br />Write on, sista!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01899768909313326172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-68419757185023382892010-05-13T10:57:15.276-04:002010-05-13T10:57:15.276-04:00i always have tons of adverbs and adjectives when ...i always have tons of adverbs and adjectives when i first draft. I can't help it, it's the way i naturally writeSarah Ahiershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02795455714801965956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-9382045743784309992010-05-13T09:30:22.812-04:002010-05-13T09:30:22.812-04:00Very nice, Anne. I love the clarity of your writin...Very nice, Anne. I love the clarity of your writing and the depth of your characters. I always look forward to your excerpts. Thanks! :)Terry Toweryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13840835964828394622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-87561887853313609962010-05-13T09:20:54.318-04:002010-05-13T09:20:54.318-04:00I love you're characters. They're so - hum...I love you're characters. They're so - human.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-51079360441044306962010-05-13T08:04:01.960-04:002010-05-13T08:04:01.960-04:00Jen -- Thank you so much for your very kind words....Jen -- Thank you so much for your very kind words. Uncle Sally is the best! He's got a lot on his plate right now, but is bearing up the best he can.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4174226224096540850.post-28683972021902894792010-05-13T07:51:54.287-04:002010-05-13T07:51:54.287-04:00This was so sad and wonderful. What an experience ...This was so sad and wonderful. What an experience to have to go through. I love the name Genna and I loved the emotion that was portrayed between all the characters, Fortuna's husband was amazing the way he handled it all and I'm sure it's a lot to take in.<br /><br />I've never personally had to deal with my grandparents having such an illness but heart attacks and parkinsons took their lives and that was a very difficult time. Great story I look forward to many more snippets!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03667521490706435608noreply@blogger.com